Third and last page this week, boys and girls. With things heating up between Mindmistress and Lightbringer, it's time to cool things off with Dasien. ...for the most part. I mean, you don't really think that these two goofballs are going to stop making fun of each other, do you?
Notice that Mindmistress is doing Lorelei's hair sweep from the Armory chapter. Do you suppose Mindmistress knows that she's getting sympathy points from Das by doing that? I suspect she does.
We had this idea of doing torture sequences for all of the heroes, but we each, one-by-one, backed out of that, leaving Mindmistress the only character to endure it at length. I think it just became difficult to do the same sort of scenes for the other characters. In particular, we had issues with Debbie, since she's always happy. How do you torture the happy zombie? So, individual torture scenes were out.
One such scene involving Dasien, which I had mentioned in my commentary for page 5, was to factor into her emotional state in this scene. It works perfectly fine without it, but there is a vestigial influence here, which you may be able to detect now that I've pointed it out.
By the way, I don't know what kind of success rate I hit here, but this page, more than any other, I was really trying to emulate Al's writing style for Mindmistress. He didn't tell me to change anything, so I think I did it right.
~Neil |
